Impromptu Speech Evaluation

Impromptu Speech Evaluation


Topic: Truly Remarkable Ads

My Ideas:
I decided to talk about 2 television ads I thought were truly remarkable. I categorised remarkable ads as ones that keep you guessing and get your attention straight away. Ads that you have no idea what it's selling until the very end.
I then explained the two ads I found remarkable.


What I thought I did well:
I believe I gave my examples well and explained the ads with sufficient detail so the audience could picture them themselves. I believe I knew enough so I would keep the speech going without having to look at my notes and went for a decent duration. I believe I spoke well, with limited ums and I used good non verbal communication like hand gestures.


What I could have improved on:
I could have listed the criteria for a good ad and gone into more detail about what makes an ad truly remarkable. This would have made my speech more informative and lengthened the speech. I also could have ended the speech with something to challenge the audience like encouraging them to observe ads more and look for remarkable ads.

Commemorative Speech - Manuscript

Commemorative Speech

It was 100 years ago that one of the greatest ships ever, the Titanic, crashed into an iceberg and sank.  Over a thousand people died and many lost friends and family. It was one of the biggest tragedies ever. Just 4 months earlier a few days after Christmas in the summer heat of outback Australia, in a time of horse drawn carriages, with no planes, electricity, or TV, a young dairy farming couple gave birth to their first child. This child would be one who would bless many. One who would be a great example. One who would always put others before themself. One who would stand firm in any trial and remain faithful to God. This child was my Grandma. To me, and all those who knew her, she was an amazing woman. Although she lived on the other side of Australia, she was a great example for me. Today I would like to pause and praise my Grandma, Sarah Marie Paull. I would like to share her life with you and some of my memories of her and show how she was such a great example for me. Because my Grandma was an amazing woman.

My Grandma was the oldest of 5 children. She had two sisters and two twin brothers. She grew up on a diary farm in Queensland, Australia. Throughout her childhood she was always working on the farm. The nearest high school was so far away that only really talented or rich kids went there. Her parents had the money to send one of their kids to school but although Grandma was the oldest she suggested they send one of her sisters. Even though she wanted to go. This is the kind of person I knew. She would always put others before herself. When she was older she was a very good dressmaker so she started a small business dressing. She enjoyed this a lot and even made clothes for the family and herself. Going through our photo albums we noticed she wore a lot of the same clothes for the last 60 years. So she must have been a good dressmaker.

Not long after she left home she needed to return to help her Mum when her Dad had a stroke. So she stayed on the farm during the Second World War. Grandma and her mum invited soldiers back from church for sing alongs around the piano and that's when she met my Grandpa.

After the war they got married in 1945 in Brisbane, the capital of Queensland, then moved down to Melbourne where Grandpa came from. They lived with his parents for their first year of married life until they could afford to rent a home.

They built their own home and moved in in 1955, which is where Grandma lived until she was 96. She then moved into a nursing home in 2008 where she lived until she was 99.

This sounds like a reasonable life, but it was not always easy for my Grandma. She had many struggles but kept her faith in God and remained strong. My Grandma was an amazing woman.

God hath not promised skies ever blue,
Flower-strewn pathways
Always for you.
God hath not promised
Sun without rain,
Joy without sorrow,
Peace without pain;
But He hath promised
Strength from above,
Unfailing sympathy,
Undying love.

This was my Grandma’s favourite poem. She never complained when sorrow or pain came her way. She faced many trials in her life but she always found her strength in the Lord. Her first son died at birth. His name was David. This was hard but my Grandma drew her strength from God and a few years later she gave birth to my Dad. In 1967 my Grandpa was suffering with leukaemia. My Grandma nursed him at home until he died in 1968. She had lost a child and the man she loved, and still had two kids to raise. I do not understand how my Grandma could be so strong. Her trust in God is the only way I can explain it. She never questioned God and continued to raise her children with Christ at the centre. My Grandma was an amazing woman.

She also knew that God had an undying love for us and everyday she shared that love with others. She never thought of herself first but was always willing to help those in need.

My Grandma never forgot a birthday or Christmas card, but then she never wanted anything for Christmas in return.   If anyone ever bought her anything, she’d say, “you shouldn’t have done that.  I’ve got everything I need.” 

She was always giving of her time and money without expecting anything in return, and had a real servant heart.  My Grandma was an amazing woman.

When she came to visit us in Bunbury, she’d always try and help my mum out with the ironing, cleaning & gardening.  One time she came over, I had a bet with my brother. He bet that she would start ironing our clothes the day after she arrived. But I won the bet because she started ironing within a few hours of arriving. My Mum would tell her to just relax instead, but Grandma always used to say, “I’m not a rocking chair Grandma, I want to help”. My Grandma was an amazing woman.

I remember hearing about how she got her drivers license. She was asked if she had ever driven into a tree. She said no and so the man gave her, her licence. That’s it. Despite such a vigorous testing process, she never bothered to drive much and would always walk everywhere, whether it was to church, the shops or the park.  Over the years, she always used to say, “I’m not getting older.  The hills are just getting steeper.” 

She lived on her own for 35 years but eventually moved into a nursing home at the age of 96. She suffered a fall not long after moving in so she upgraded to a walker. I can still picture her with her huge grin as she speeds around the corridors with the rest of us struggling to keep up. If they had organised a walker race there she would’ve won hands down.  Even Dad sometimes had trouble keeping up with her walking, so he’d repeatedly ask her if she wanted to sit down, more for his benefit than hers.

Grandma loved making jokes and making as all laugh. Whenever it came to our hair she would always make fun of us. When we woke up or got out of the shower she would say, “You look like you’ve seen a ghost.” Or. “You look like you’ve stuck your finger in an electric socket” She would have a cute little smug smile on her face, because she was proud of the joke she’d made.  She’d say it every time one of us had spiky hair but every time she still made us laugh.

Another example of her great sense of humour was when my cousin, Amanda who at the time was 28 use to say to Grandma, that she wasn’t allowed to die until Amanda got married. Grandma would laugh at her and jokingly say  “I don’t know if I can wait that long.”

My Grandma blessed many. She was an example to many. She always put others before herself. She stood firm in any trial. She remained faithful to God. To me, and all those who knew her, my Grandma was an amazing woman.

Finally I would like to share with you a message from my Grandma to all her Grandchildren.

“My wish and prayers for you all is that you will be able to withstand the pressures of the world and grow in faith in God with the Bible as your guide.  Also trust God to guide you in what you do and undertake.  My prayer for you is that you will all grow up as people of good character, trusting in God.  As long as I live, I will be praying for you.  With love, Grandma.”

She was an amazing Grandma who was always loving, caring and giving to all of her grandchildren.

Grandma, we all miss you dearly and you will be loved and in our hearts forever. 

Commemorative Speech Planning Sheet

Speech Planning Sheet
For Commemorative Speech

Your name: Daniel Paull

Topic of your speech: My Grandma

General purpose: Inspire

Specific purpose statement:

My specific purpose is to inspire my audience by praising my Grandma.


Introduction:
Attention step: Explain or write out how will you hook the audience?


It was 100 years ago that one of the greatest ships ever, the Titanic, crashed into an iceberg and sank.  Over a thousand people died and many lost friends and family. It was one of the biggest tragedies ever. Just 4 months earlier a few days after Christmas in the summer heat of outback Australia, in a time of horse drawn carriages, with no planes, electricity, or TV, a young dairy farming couple gave birth to their first child. This child would be one who would bless many. One who would be a great example. One who would always put others before themself. One who would stand firm in any trial and remain faithful to God. This child was my Grandma. To me, and all those who knew her, she was an amazing woman. 

Talking about the Titanic gets the audience wondering whom I am talking about.


Credibility step: To me, and all those who knew her, my Grandma was an amazing woman. Although she lived on the other side of Australia to me, she was a great example for me.


Central idea: one sentence (sometimes called a thesis) that sums up whole speech that you say in the introduction.

Today I would like to pause and praise my Grandma, Sarah Marie Paull, who was an important person in my life. I would like to share her life with you and some of my memories of her and show how she was such a great example for me.


Preview: Road map for the audience your main points. (May be part of central idea).


I would like to share her life with you and some of my memories of her and show how she was such a great example for me.

Main Points: (sum up how you will develop the body of the speech. First you will ______, then you will _______...)

Body:

I.               History/Overview of my Grandma’s life

II.             My Grandma’s favorite poem - explain how the meaning of the poem showed in her life.

III.           Stories of Grandma that revealed some of her characteristics

IV.           Message from my Grandma to her Grandchildren

Australia Informative Speech Outline

Speech Outline - Daniel Paull

Australia

Introduction

I.               Imagine arriving at a new country and being asked this question. Since Australia is in the southern hemisphere does the compass point the other way? Does North point towards the South Pole?

1.    And this person is a pre med student at Northwest so they should know this.

2.    When my brother first got here he was asked. Was it difficult learning another language? They did not know Australians spoke English too.

3.    Well what would you think about those people and the country they came from? You wouldn’t think they are very smart, would you?

II.             I’m sure no one hear wants to ask a question like that to a foreigner and seem uneducated but you may ask silly questions like this more than you know –

1.             I have done quite a bit of research and since I have lived there for 18 years I already know a lot about it.

2.             I am to educate you on Australia so you wont be in an embarrassing situation like this.

III.            I will give a brief history, mention the geography and people, and clear up some common misconceptions you all may have about Australia.

1.    So if you meet another Australian you will not seem stupid but well educated.

2.    Also some of you may want to travel to Australia, so should know what is true about it and what isn’t.

Body

I.               Ill start off by explaining the history of how Australia was formed.

1.    In 1786, the British government decided to start a convict settlement in Australia. - This allowed England to claim the country and stop France or Spain from taking it.

2.    Between 1788 and 1868, about 160,000 convicts were sent to Australia. - What happened to them when they got to Australia depended on their skills or education and how they behaved themselves.

3.    In 1851, gold was discovered in Australia for the first time.

A.    The discovery marked the beginning of the Australian gold rushes and a radical change in the economic and social structure of the nation.

B.    In 1852 alone, 370,000 immigrants arrived in Australia due to the gold rush and the economy of the nation boomed.

C.    This is one of the main contributions to making Australia a country with one of the most diverse populations.

4.    European settlement spread throughout Australia and during the mid 1800s the separate states were formed. - It wasn’t until 1901 though that the different states agreed to form a federation.

II.             Now that you know how it was formed I would like to show you how it sizes up to America in its geography and population.

1.    Australia’s land area is quite similar to that of America’s.

A.    Australia would cover around 96% of the mainland of the United States.

B.    Although they are similar in size America has many more people.

C.    Australia’s total population according to The Australian Bureau of Statistics is around 23 million. - Making America 14 times bigger in population.

D.    The biggest city of Australia is Sydney, which has 4.5 million people – that is a quarter of the size of New York.

2.    Australia has 6 states and 2 territories.

A.    (Name all the states and territories on map)

B.    I am from Western Australia. To give you an idea of its size, Western Australia is 3.6 times larger than Texas.

3.    Lots of people have thought us Aussies are bushman who live in a harsh desert environment.

A.    Although 70% of it would be considered the outback, according to Australian bureau of statistics less than 3% of Australians live in these remote areas.

B.    Most people live on the coast in a tropical to temperate climate.

III.            Now I am going to go through some common misconceptions you may have on Australia so you may understand the country better.

1.    Australia is well known for dangerous snakes and spiders.

A.    I have heard of people not wanting to go there because they think many people are killed from them.

B.    But while it does have a lot of venomous animals, they have killed very few people.

C.    According to University of Melbourne toxicologist Ken Winkel, on average there are only 2-4 deaths from snakebites in Australia each year.

D.    It is true, however, that Australia has the world’s most venomous snake.

a)     The inland taipan has enough venom to kill 100 grown men.

b)    But there are no records of it killing anyone. Thanks to antivenom treatment and its own shyness it’s been harmless.

2.    Australia is also famous for this animal (referring to slide).

A.    A lot of you would refer to it as a Koala bear.

B.    In fact, they are not even distantly related to bears.

a)     Perhaps the only thing they have in common with bears is the amount they sleep – but even bears couldn’t match them in this. 

b)    According to The Australian Koala Foundation, each day, the average adult koala spends 18-20 hours sleeping. The rest of the day they are eating.

3.    The kangaroo and also emu are Australia’s national animals.

A.    Kangaroos are not pets and nor do we ride them.

B.    Kangaroos are quite cute and can be fed in wildlife parks but they are also a delicious meal.

C.    We actually eat both our national animals.

a)     Kangaroo meat is considered to be similar to high quality beef, they are difficult to cook but when done right it is delicious.

b)    It is less common to eat Emus but don’t be surprised to see emu eggs on the menu.

4.    Another question I get asked regularly is what is vegemite and why do all Australians love it.

A.    It is made from, yeast extract - a by-product of making beer.

B.    A lot of Americans make the mistake of putting too much on.

C.    However not all Australians like it. I myself find it quite disgusting and according to Wall Street Journal marketers are now struggling to get young Aussies to eat it.

5.    I could go all day on misconceptions but here are just four more.

A.    “Lets put a shrimp on the Barbie”

B.    Also for those wondering there are no outback steakhouses in Australia,

C.    We don’t have the Aussie shampoo

D.    We don’t have fosters beer.

IV.           If you ever plan on going to Australia you may hear about drop bears

1.    They are similar to Koalas but are actually carnivores.

2.    They mainly prey on medium sized animals like kangaroos, but there have been quite a few human deaths.

3.    When they fall onto their prey they latch on with their curled claws so the victim cant escape.

4.    They are savaged beasts and some known areas have been bordered off from the public but due to deforestation there has been sightings in some public parks

5.    But don’t worry. Drop bears are not real.

6.    It is a story used to scare tourists and you would be surprised on how many people believe it

Conclusion

V.             Now that you know how Australia was formed, how it compares to America in size and now know the truths behind some common misconceptions you are prepared to shock an Australian with your knowledge.

- You can be the change that stops Australians thinking Americans are ignorant.